Also, lol at shoulder-mounted GN drives.

Edit: Also did random maintenance stuff.

@Lothair takes one look at Exelar and instantly guesses what has just happened. After he helps Exelar settle down, he scolds Exelar for not following his advice earlier, and tells him that it’s now his responsibility to deal with it.

Lothair isn’t meant to be that kind of irresponsible type which, if you put it this way, will portray. I believe that the correct way to explain this situation from Lothair’s perspective is that… well Lothair already made it pretty clear to Exelar prior to that scene what he thinks of Exam, and that they need to get rid of *her* (or whatever his approach is in first place).

@Exelar leaves trying to forget what happened, hoping against hope that Lothair’s actions could be explained by his stern moral opposition to the idea of a “trap.”

I think, for the purpose of getting some interesting scenes, and maybe some lulz, that’s EXACTLY what Exelar should think ( lol ). Because for one, that is a heck of a secret to unravel, and for two, Exelar might just be too shocked to really consider the problem logically for a moment, and once he decides (during said shock) that the “trap” is what Lothair was so concerned about, he’d probably toss the problem to back of his head.
After all, it’s hardly dangerous at that point, nor does it come anywhere close to being as important as the other issues he’s dealing with at that point in the story.

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1: When Exam is in a bloodlust state, change the color of his eyes to red. I’ll clarify this with a CG later.

2: There needs to be some clarification on the decision points, and decision points that actually affect the outcome. I’m fond of the ‘choosing two characters to introduce to Exam’ portion though, this would make for some interesting scenes. I’m thinking that certain combinations would include some extra lines.

*Examples would be Kayeten and Aoric, Rika and Sofiya, Rika and Kayeten, Sofiya and Hikari, etc. This would be amusing to bring up in Friday’s meeting

3: The path-locking decision points need to be synchronised; some of them should involve choosing between one character or another. Once again, we should have a brainstorming session in the next meeting.

Altogether though, I would say it’s a pretty good draft.

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1. Yes, you don’t really need to write out exactly what happens in Penthiaen Arc, but I’d prefer you plan out the generalities - what major points you’d like to see met and what goals accomplished in her path in the Penthiaen Arc. Because those ARE things that need to be decided early, unlike the details that can be left hanging for now until we have a better grasp of what exactly Penthiae Arc constitutes.

2. Play Tomoyo’s arc in CLANNAD, because I noticed some drastic similarities here, except the relationship aspect between Tomoya-Tomoyo and Canan-Exelar is flipped here. In Tomoyo’s arc it’s Tomoya who felt that he’s dragging her down.
Of course, Exelar can’t take Tomoyo’s step and take the “I don’t care about everything else” deal, more like resolving himself to managing both tasks at once in this circumstance.

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